His hands were shaking and sweating yet they were firmly set in the form of an unmistakeable fist. What he was about to lose was more than what he prepared for. The only force standing between him and darkness was the glint of her light, her beauty. Stronger than him.
This is a good piece. But is it supposed to be a complete story? (I know it can't be complete complete, because it's only 50 words...but still.)
ReplyDeleteBecause we have a hint of a fist hitting a HER, but there is no hit. Should there be a hit?
It's supposed to leave you hanging a little bit. No it's not hitting her it's more of a her stopping him from doing something
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